
Although the sword of the king rang cold with fury,
it wore the warm carmine blood of his enemy.
His heart thumped, was proud like his weapon,
at the behest of his own revenge. Beating his chest aloud,
he exclaimed, I am victor o’er my adversary and the
grave! Who shall come against me? I have the fortitude of
a hundred men! I would have learnt to love black days like bright
ones. Who dare stand against me in the day of battle? My feet hath
trampled the wicked. My arm hath stricken the feeble
warrior at his doorstep. My eye has seen the fields ripe
with the blood of the challenger. I have inhaled the breath
of the assailant and exhaled in mighty triumph! I am slave to no army,
ha! As the king spoke, a random arrow struck him in the heart.
Benjamin Thomas


As they say, “Pride goes before the fall!” Well done!
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I’m glad you found Mister Linky, Benjamin, and joined us with this exciting Prosery piece. The opening is a perfect hook, which drew me in, and I love the contrast of the sword,’ cold with fury, and the ‘warm carmine blood’. But oh, such hubris, and he got his comeuppance in the end.
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Thanks. I never had a prompt like this. Fascinating!
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I hope you join us for other prompts. Lillian has a Poetics prompt later today.
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Cool. Is the Poetics on Dverse?
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It is, and it will go live at 3.00 pm EST in the US.
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Thanks!
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You’re welcome!
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What a corker Benjamin 🙌 (PS I love your rail-track photo)
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Thank you.
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Wonderful with an unexpected surprise at the end….for the reader and the king!
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Indeed!
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Killed by hubris. I’m sure the arrow came from Mount Olympus or some other such lofty place.
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😂😂
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and silence came at last over the land. Wow. A great feel story Prosery. Complete! Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks for reading!
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The transference of the almost melancholic line of poetry into a braggadocious statement of was clever usage indeed.
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Thanks 🙏🏽
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